Cambridge book 4 ielts writing preparation
You should spend 40 minutes on this task.
Present a writing argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. IELTS Writing Task2 General-Cambridge IELTS book3-Test4
“Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas .”
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and evidence.
You should write at least 250 words.
Ielts writing preparation model answer
This is an answer written by a candidate who achieved a Band 6 score. Here is the examiner’s comment:
The writer expresses a point of view, but the ideas show little development and the argument does not go anywhere. The writing is well-organized, however, and can be followed with little difficult. Sentence structures are sufficiently varied, but grammatical and iexcial control is quite often faulty (e.g. subject/verb agreement, incorrect use of tenses, mass/count nouns).
In balancing the world economic growth, the underdevelopment of the Third World Nations have been drawn to the attention of the developed countries of the Western. Thus, governmental policies and interference in the agricultural business of the poorer nations were made to secure their dominant source of the economy. Many discussions among economists and politicians also put their focus on the other aspects. That is, to improve the health education and trade for the developing countries. However, the improvements cannot be made by these countries, but more external assistance and aids should be done.
Because of the shortage of food supply, the people in poorer nations (i.e. Africa) are easily prone to disease, hunger and death. When natural or environmental disasters happen, they are threaten with their lives. Education cannot be well developed as a result of frequent drought, famines and disease spreading. The other countries, while emphasizing on on the development of agriculture in the Third World, cannot really give the solution to the cyclical problem which has been existing for a long time. It is time to consider the consequences of all the waste of efforts in trying to help the economic growth of the Third World and to think from the other perspectives. The richer countries have the power to rebuilt the Third World by taking care the essentials-health, education and trade. More aids for providing medicine, educational needs and materials can be done by the richer countries. The assistance of trade and developing business in the poorer countries also can be of a great help to poorer nations.
If the richer countries can be more serious about the essential issues of how a nation develops, and well consider the special situations and circumstances those poorer nations are facing, the improvements will be more efficiently made. The governments of developed countries are, in some ways, responsible – though not obliged – for the future of those developing countries.